Comments on: Some Permanent Things http://www.frontporchrepublic.com/2009/08/some-permanent-things/ Place. Limits. Liberty. Thu, 09 Feb 2012 02:38:46 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v= By: D.W. Sabin http://www.frontporchrepublic.com/2009/08/some-permanent-things/#comment-11331 D.W. Sabin Thu, 27 Aug 2009 21:00:48 +0000 http://www.frontporchrepublic.com/?p=5570#comment-11331 Wilson, Damn you...I once tried poetry as a test by a linguist friend who suffers under my prolixity and he read it patiently and promised never to ever make it public nor available to the proper authorities at Belvue. A Fine Piece! The complicity of all of us in this banal period is a real mystery. With the soul and its God dead per Nietzsche ...killed by default of course, Sentience left us too. And who is so boldly daft as to say the Soul and Reason are not one in the same? Wilson,
Damn you…I once tried poetry as a test by a linguist friend who suffers under my prolixity and he read it patiently and promised never to ever make it public nor available to the proper authorities at Belvue.

A Fine Piece! The complicity of all of us in this banal period is a real mystery. With the soul and its God dead per Nietzsche …killed by default of course, Sentience left us too. And who is so boldly daft as to say the Soul and Reason are not one in the same?

]]> By: Weasly Pilgrim http://www.frontporchrepublic.com/2009/08/some-permanent-things/#comment-11301 Weasly Pilgrim Thu, 27 Aug 2009 13:12:15 +0000 http://www.frontporchrepublic.com/?p=5570#comment-11301 Wonderful! I particularly enjoy the way the rhyme scheme and cadence is varied between the first four lines and the second four lines of each octet. I don’t know about you, but I must read a poem aloud before I can really appreciate the details of its construction. If it doesn’t pass muster as actual vibrations in the ether, I have trouble appreciating it. Your poem passes that test with (heh!) flying colors. This couplet in the second stanza resonates painfully with me, due to a family situation of some time back: <blockquote>Leave love and faith in nursing homes to rot / Where they feed on those innards we forgot;</blockquote> One question: Which came first in composition, <em>attic</em> or <em>vatic</em>? I suspect <em>attic</em> as the image of finding an old flag in the attic is a natural one, whereas the word <em>vatic</em> is sufficiently unusual that I had to look it up. Then again, on FPR at least, just about every piece you write makes use of at least one word I do not know (and I pride myself on a large vocabulary), so perhaps it came the other way. I ask because I used to write poetry and I find it endlessly interesting how others go about composition. It has been many years since I composed a serious poem (as opposed to some throw-away limerick or couplet spouted for cheap laughs and immediately forgotten), but the desire to again pick up this craft of my youth has been stirred recently by several fine examples of excellent poetry which I have come across. Thank you for sharing! Wonderful! I particularly enjoy the way the rhyme scheme and cadence is varied between the first four lines and the second four lines of each octet. I don’t know about you, but I must read a poem aloud before I can really appreciate the details of its construction. If it doesn’t pass muster as actual vibrations in the ether, I have trouble appreciating it. Your poem passes that test with (heh!) flying colors.

This couplet in the second stanza resonates painfully with me, due to a family situation of some time back:

Leave love and faith in nursing homes to rot /
Where they feed on those innards we forgot;

One question: Which came first in composition, attic or vatic? I suspect attic as the image of finding an old flag in the attic is a natural one, whereas the word vatic is sufficiently unusual that I had to look it up. Then again, on FPR at least, just about every piece you write makes use of at least one word I do not know (and I pride myself on a large vocabulary), so perhaps it came the other way.

I ask because I used to write poetry and I find it endlessly interesting how others go about composition. It has been many years since I composed a serious poem (as opposed to some throw-away limerick or couplet spouted for cheap laughs and immediately forgotten), but the desire to again pick up this craft of my youth has been stirred recently by several fine examples of excellent poetry which I have come across.

Thank you for sharing!

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